The expreince of today!

左岸の鱼

简单找了下，第一段的语法和句法错误

today afternoon —— this afternoon

seven classmates and me —— I

seven classmates and me to have—— went to have

a interview —— an

they are saying —— they were saying  

a forergner came from Norway—— a forergner who

they are wanting to employ—— they are in need  of

who good at computer —— who are/is

understand what they are saying —— were

have slow down —— slown

in other saying ——in  other words

havn't learn——learned / learnt


第一段基本时态错误，应该一般过去时为主。
叙述过去的事实时应该使用过去时态。。。。

修改下，就应该表达的清楚点了。。。。。

klebe

let's love the girl to death [s:52]

blueskymay

chance to success----succeed 用动词可能更好点
另外逗号好象多了点,英文中一般用"."比较多,不象写中文文章哦