标题: 看一 下这篇六级作文能得多少分！ [打印本页] 作者: titimine 时间: 2005-6-18 21:11
标题: 看一 下这篇六级作文能得多少分！
<P><FONT size=4>Now ,as everybody knows,the software company ,especially in China,are facing a serious problem---their products are pirated .As the copy ones are easily to manufacture,they can be sold much cheaper and,so,sold much more.Even though the pirated ones are of less safe and less uses, since they are cheaper, people prefers them.</FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=4> Why the pirated products appears?Above all,we know that the softwares are expensive for us to buy and, to sell pirated products is a quick way to make money for those who pirate</FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=4> If this situation goes on,I mean ,as time goes on,the software company can get less and less money because lesss and less users use their products.So ,they can not afford the costs of research and manufacter ,and no company exist on,And finally ,all of us,can use no software more.</FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=4> so what can we do?At first,as the users, we must know ,the 知识产权are protected by the law,if we buy the pirated products,we break the law meanwhile. So,never buy those ones!To the company,they should do lots of job to prevent their products to be pirated and to cut down the price. To the government,people who 侵犯知识产权 shouild be punished severely!</FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=4>这是下午六级考试作文我的草稿，因为其中的两个词组我是用符号代替的，现在已经不记得了所以就用中文了。</FONT></P>
<P><FONT size=4> 大家觉得能拿几分？？</FONT></P>
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作者: titimine 时间: 2005-6-18 21:21
<P>如果是这样就好了</P>
<P>但是因为打草稿（字迹不好看）浪费了好多时间，所以后来最后一段几乎就没有写上去了，如果最后一段用</P>
<P> SO WE SHOULD NOT BUY THE PIRATED PRODUCTS</P>
<P>又会出现怎么样的结果！</P>
作者: 稀饭 时间: 2005-6-18 21:26
<P>写得比我好呢~哎~</P>
作者: titimine 时间: 2005-6-18 21:35
<P>但是你的分数会比我高啊</P>
<P>唉</P>
作者: pearly2008 时间: 2005-6-19 21:04
提示: 作者被禁止或删除 内容自动屏蔽作者: pearly2008 时间: 2005-6-19 21:09
提示: 作者被禁止或删除 内容自动屏蔽作者: titimine 时间: 2005-6-19 23:14
<P>it's happy to hear this voice!So that I could do better!</P>
<P>But I am sorry to say :so many grammar problem you have.</P>
<P>let;s do better,just better than tomorrow did,and no doubt we will succeed!</P>
作者: 左岸の鱼 时间: 2005-6-20 14:44
<P>短句太多，反而显得过于零碎。长短句交错最好。</P>
<P>论点不清晰，论据不足。</P>
<P>表述一般。</P>
作者: pearly2008 时间: 2005-6-20 17:07
提示: 作者被禁止或删除 内容自动屏蔽作者: titimine 时间: 2005-6-20 21:45
u will be much better ,if you want to be better!
作者: 墙角野猫 时间: 2005-6-22 09:03
<DIV class=quote><B>以下是引用<I>左岸の鱼</I>在2005-6-20 14:44:14的发言：</B><BR>
<P>短句太多，反而显得过于零碎。长短句交错最好。</P>
<P>论点不清晰，论据不足。</P>
<P>表述一般。</P></DIV>
<br>精辟!~
作者: titimine 时间: 2005-6-26 23:39
xiexie dajia d yijian
作者: ysf123 时间: 2005-7-4 20:51
顶
作者: D___C 时间: 2005-7-5 15:21
[em15]
作者: shadow 时间: 2005-7-10 01:18
<P>not bad ,continue making great efforts, you will make progress </P>